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Some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #company
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It is certainly true that working for
big
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a big
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 company is better than
small
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a small
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 one
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 individual growth, more exposure and opportunity. I fully agree with
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 opinion and
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the justification
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 is
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as
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below. On the one hand, working with
large
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the large
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 company provides a number of benefits to individual
employee
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employees
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. These benefits include
good
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a good
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 salary, medical, housing, insurance and other perks. Their staff get
multicultural
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a multicultural
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 office environment with assigned roles and
responsibility
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responsibilities
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.
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, they get excellent future progress and
chances
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their chances
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 of promotion are
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 higher.
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, these
companies
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 are exposed to international level,
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,
empoyee
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employee
 may get chance to relocate to abroad branches.
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, a plethora of software large IT
companies
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 depute their employees on rotation
everyyear
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every year
 for personal development and enhancing skills.
On the other hand
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, small
companies
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 have lots of
competitiors
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competitors
competitions
 which
make
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makes
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 their businesses and
profits margin
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profit margins
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 very limited. These firms always operate on a small margin. Any losses or market up and down may result
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 stop
the
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 business.
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,
such
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companies
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 may
shutdown
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shut down
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 immediately.
This
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 is the reason, people think twice
to join
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about joining
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 small
companies
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, during
covid
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the
 pandemic, very
wellknown
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well known
well-known
 small IT
companies
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 closed
due to
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financial
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the financial
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 crisis and the employees lost
jobs
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their jobs
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. As per
recent
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a recent
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 newspaper update, many IT engineers resigned from small
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 and
join
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joined
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 large
companies
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 to avoid any
such
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uncertainties
uncertainities
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uncertainties
 In conclusion, most
of
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the
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people believe that working with large
companies
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are
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is
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 better considering
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overall
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the overall
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 advantages compared to small ones and I totally agree
of
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with
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 it.
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Expand on both the positives and potential negatives of working for large companies to create a balanced discussion.
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There are several insightful and relevant points about the advantages and disadvantages of working for large and small companies.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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