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Topic: Some people believe online reading material should be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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Many people argue that individuals utilize online reading resources for children to get
a knowledge
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 and other
community
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communities
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 prefer the soft copy material for learning. I agree
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a
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apply
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toched
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torched
materials
 are used in various
aspect
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 of life . And facts related to my view will be discussed.
To begin
 with a primer reason,
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printed
materials
 are easy to remember. Many younger
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people use
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 different language skills via
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printed paper. Can memorise facts and information which are in books as an example rather than online sources. By way of conclusion,
after
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 essay has manifested the
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 points, it can be
retirared
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retired
reiterated
 that mental can gain more data from
materials
 which are
allowing
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 to touch it .
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 online
materials
 have affected
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users.
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Your essay needs a more comprehensive introduction to clearly state both views and your opinion. Begin with a more general statement about the topic before stating your opinion and outlining the points you will discuss.
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Work on organizing your ideas clearly. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea, supported by relevant examples or explanations. Try to develop your points more thoroughly.
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Include more specific examples to support your points. This adds depth to your discussion and makes your argument more convincing.
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Work on grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity. Some sentences are awkwardly phrased and may confuse the reader. Proofread your work to avoid these issues.
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Your essay addresses the task and both views are mentioned, which shows a good understanding of the prompt.
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You have made an attempt to conclude your essay, which shows an understanding of essay structure.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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