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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.
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The two bar charts illustrate percentages and
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number
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numbers
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 to explain the changes in marital status and
people
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 married or divorced respectively, over four decades,
since
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 1970 to 2000 in America The
number
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 of
people
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 married did not change a lot between 1970 and 2000. In 1970 and the following decade the
number
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 of
people
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 who were married remained stable,
while
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 in 1990 and 2000 the numbers
were
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slightly decreased. In the same
period
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 the
number
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 of
people
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 who were divorced in 1970 until 2000 remained stable, except a small increment of numbers in 1980. It is clear to see that the majority of adult Americans who were married couples have a higher rate because the percentage in 1970 was
of
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70%,
whereas
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 in 2000 one seventh lower.
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, there were
people
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 who had never married in 2000 and they were and just
one third
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 more in 1970. The other two
status
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statuses
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 which are widowed and divorced had small percentages in the whole period studied.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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