You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter • Correct the information in the article • Explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information • Suggest what the magazine should do about this situation
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing in connection with the article in your
magazine
which has been published in your magazine
about the infrastructure of Zanjan. According to
this
article, Zanjan has a weak infrastructure. From an environmental viewpoint, a number of trees are a few and the city has just one central park. However
, I should point out that as a result
of changing local officials, such
as the mayor and their deputies, different measures have been taken in order to solve these problems. For example
, some new parks have been established and different trees have been planted in the main parts of the city. Therefore
, this
argument that was written in your magazine
about Zanjan is not true.
Given the fact that your magazine
is an international travel magazine
and it has different fruitful articles about various cities and countries. It is pretty crucial for your periodic to publish correct information. Due to
the fact that this
magazine
has a great impact on travelers’
decisions. Most Change the spelling
travellers’
of
travelers who intend to make an itinerary for their trip, use its advice so as to make a correct decision. Change preposition
apply
Therefore
, as a result
of false information, travelers’
decisions have been changed totally.
To rectify Change the spelling
travellers’
this
situation, I suggest that you choose different local reporters from each city to provide suitable news and articles for your magazine
.
I look forward to receiving your message.
Yours faithfully,
Mahshid KargarSubmitted by kargar.mh1992 on
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coherence cohesion
Include a brief overview of the inaccurate information at the beginning of the letter for clearer context.
task achievement
Proofread for minor grammatical mistakes such as repeated phrases and slight awkwardness in phrasing.
task achievement
The letter clearly addresses all parts of the task, providing corrections, explaining the importance of accuracy, and offering constructive suggestions.
coherence cohesion
Ideas are logically structured, and the letter follows a clear progression from introduction to detailed explanation to suggestions.
coherence cohesion
Paragraphs are well-organized, each focusing on a single idea, making the letter coherent and easy to read.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite