The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates how many tourists visit the Caribbean
island
from 2010 to 2017, The
visitors
usually stay on
cruise
ships
or stay on the
island
.
Overall
, The number of tourists is increasingly rising.
Visitors
staying on the
island
took the highest proportion at the start of the period,
while
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
surpassed
at the end
of the period. In the beginning, there were 1
million
people who visited the Caribbean
island
, comprised of
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
and
visitors
staying on the
island
(around 0.7
million
and about 0.3
million
respectively). In the end, the total number reached its peak at 3.5
million
in 2017,
while
visitors
staying on
cruise
ships
were just 2
million
and others were at 1.5
million
. Between 2013 and 2015,
visitors
staying on the islands remain stable at 1.5
million
,
whereas
, those who stay on
cruise
ships
sharply go up from 0.5
million
to above 1
million
.
Therefore
,
visitor
Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
show examples
who
stay
Wrong verb form
stayed
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on the
island
got surpassed in the next year,
while
they dropped to about 1.3
million
but others keep climb to 1.5
million
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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