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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates how many tourists visit the Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017, The
visitors
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 usually stay on
cruise
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ships
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 or stay on the
island
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.
Overall
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, The number of tourists is increasingly rising.
Visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 took the highest proportion at the start of the period,
while
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visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 surpassed
at the end
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 of the period. In the beginning, there were 1
million
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 people who visited the Caribbean
island
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, comprised of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 and
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 (around 0.7
million
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 and about 0.3
million
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 respectively). In the end, the total number reached its peak at 3.5
million
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 in 2017,
while
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visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 were just 2
million
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 and others were at 1.5
million
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. Between 2013 and 2015,
visitors
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 staying on the islands remain stable at 1.5
million
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,
whereas
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, those who stay on
cruise
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ships
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 sharply go up from 0.5
million
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 to above 1
million
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.
Therefore
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,
visitor
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visitors
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 who
stay
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stayed
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 on the
island
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 got surpassed in the next year,
while
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 they dropped to about 1.3
million
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 but others keep climb to 1.5
million
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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