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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the
road
 access to a hospital
city
 in a 3
year-period
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year period
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.
Overall
, it can be seen that there were significant changes
the
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to the
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road
 to
went
Wrong verb form
go
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 to the hospital,
besides
 that, there were many
improvement
Change to a plural noun
improvements
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 that
already
Add a missing verb
have already
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made
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been made
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 like
bus
Correct article usage
the bus
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 station, roundabout, and
they
Correct your spelling
the
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 separate the public and staff
car
 park.
Looking in
Verb problem
In
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 2007,
in
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on
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the
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apply
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Hospital
road
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Road
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 there were six buses stop and there location three
in
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on
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 the right
side
 and three
in
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on
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 the left
side
.
In addition
, there was a
car
pak
Correct your spelling
park
 for staff and
public
Correct article usage
the public
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 nearby the buses stop. Moving to
City
Correct article usage
the City
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 Hospital in 2010, in the middle of the
City
road
, they made
roundabout
Correct article usage
a roundabout
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 and connected
to
Correct pronoun usage
it to
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hospital
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the hospital
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road
, and there was another roundabout
road
in
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on
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south
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the south
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side
 of the
city
 hospital.
Furthermore
, the
buses
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bus
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 stop had
demolished
Add a missing verb
been demolished
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 and they made
bus
Correct article usage
a bus
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 station located
in
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on
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west
Correct article usage
the west
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side
and
Correct word choice
which
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its
Correct your spelling
is
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 connected to
hospital
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the hospital
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road
, and
then
,
in
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on
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 the east
side
, there was a staff
car
 park.
Moreover
, in the east
site
Correct your spelling
side
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 of the
City
Hospital
Add a comma
Hospital,
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 there was a public
car
 park.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, car, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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