The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the
road
access to a hospital
city
in a 3
year-period
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year period
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.
Overall
, it can be seen that there were significant changes
the
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to the
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road
to
went
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go
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to the hospital,
besides
that, there were many
improvement
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improvements
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that
already
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have already
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made
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been made
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like
bus
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the bus
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station, roundabout, and
they
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the
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separate the public and staff
car
park.
Looking in
Verb problem
In
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2007,
in
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on
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the
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apply
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Hospital
road
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Road
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there were six buses stop and there location three
in
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on
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the right
side
and three
in
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on
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the left
side
.
In addition
, there was a
car
pak
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park
for staff and
public
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the public
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nearby the buses stop. Moving to
City
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the City
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Hospital in 2010, in the middle of the
City
road
, they made
roundabout
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a roundabout
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and connected
to
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it to
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hospital
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the hospital
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road
, and there was another roundabout
road
in
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on
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south
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the south
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side
of the
city
hospital.
Furthermore
, the
buses
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bus
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stop had
demolished
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been demolished
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and they made
bus
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a bus
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station located
in
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on
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west
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the west
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side
and
Correct word choice
which
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its
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is
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connected to
hospital
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the hospital
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road
, and
then
,
in
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on
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the east
side
, there was a staff
car
park.
Moreover
, in the east
site
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side
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of the
City
Hospital
Add a comma
Hospital,
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there was a public
car
park.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, car, side with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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