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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the
road
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 access to a hospital
city
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 in a 3
year-period
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year period
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there were significant changes
the
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to the
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road
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 to
went
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go
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 to the hospital,
besides
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 that, there were many
improvement
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improvements
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 that
already
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have already
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made
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been made
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 like
bus
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the bus
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 station, roundabout, and
they
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the
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 separate the public and staff
car
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 park.
Looking in
Verb problem
In
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 2007,
in
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on
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the
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apply
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Hospital
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road
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Road
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 there were six buses stop and there location three
in
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on
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 the right
side
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 and three
in
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on
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 the left
side
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.
In addition
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, there was a
car
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pak
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park
 for staff and
public
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the public
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 nearby the buses stop. Moving to
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City
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the City
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 Hospital in 2010, in the middle of the
City
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road
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, they made
roundabout
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a roundabout
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 and connected
to
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it to
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hospital
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the hospital
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road
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, and there was another roundabout
road
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in
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on
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south
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the south
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side
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 of the
city
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 hospital.
Furthermore
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, the
buses
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bus
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 stop had
demolished
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been demolished
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 and they made
bus
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a bus
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 station located
in
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on
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west
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the west
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side
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and
Correct word choice
which
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its
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is
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 connected to
hospital
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the hospital
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road
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, and
then
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,
in
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on
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 the east
side
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, there was a staff
car
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 park.
Moreover
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, in the east
site
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side
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 of the
City
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Hospital
Add a comma
Hospital,
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 there was a public
car
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 park.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city, car, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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