Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to their studies in school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

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follow the plan. So, they will get
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unforgettable memory. On the other
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lose. When
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families
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the end, a good education is important for
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parties can work together,
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their own
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Concentration
  • Engagement
  • Curriculum
  • Attention span
  • Learning disorders
  • Interactive learning
  • Personalized learning
  • Supportive learning environment
  • Mental health
  • Organizational skills
  • Educational policy
  • Mindfulness
  • Screen time
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