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The given graph illustrates how much money was spent on books in four different countries between 1995 and 2005. Some countries increased slightly, some countries grew slightly but in general, four countries also increased.

The given graph illustrates how much money was spent on books in four different countries between 1995 and 2005. Some countries increased slightly, some countries grew slightly but in general, four countries also increased.
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The given graph illustrates how much money was spent on books in four different
countries
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 between 1995 and 2005. Some
countries
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 increased slightly, some
countries
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 grew slightly but in general, four
countries
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also
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 increased.
Germany
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 started as the first one from 80
million
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dollars
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 in 1995.
Germany
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 raised approximately
to
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10
million
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dollars
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 until 1999.
Then
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Germany
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 fell slowly to just over 80
million
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dollars
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 in 2003. And
finally
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, climbed gradually
around
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 90
million
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dollars
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 and
Germany
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 started as the
first,
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again finished as the first in the graph.
France
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 started from between 50 and 60
million
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dollars
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 in 1995.
Then
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France
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 continued to increase slowly until 2001. After that,
France
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 increased but more slowly to 2005 and
France
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 still was second. Italy started to grow steadily in 1997.
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 it came back to 50
million
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dollars
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 in 1999.
France
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 continued to climb gently until 2005 and it finished at just over 50
million
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dollars
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 but Italy finished as the
last
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 one. Austria had been
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last
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the last
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 one when the graph started.
Then
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 Austria increased slightly from 30
million
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 to 40
million
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dollars
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 in 1999. And it stayed stable until 2001. After that, it
had
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reached
to
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just over 70
million
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dollars
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 with two dramatic skyrockets and it finished as the third.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, germany, million, dollars, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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