The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart compares the
cost
of
bananas
in four nations between 1994 and 2004.
Overall
, the
price
of
bananas
was the lowest in the USA during the recorded period and had the highest average
cost
in Japan.
Accroding
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According
to the graph, the
price
of
bananas
was exactly 1 dollar for each
kilogram
between 1994 and 1997,
then
, it increased in 1998 to just below 1.5
dollars
,
after
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that its
price
levelled off for the rest of the years. The
cost
of
bananas
in Germany was more than its
cost
in the USA during the recorded years and exactly 1.5
dollars
per
kilogram
and
then
experienced some fluctuations and
touche
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reached
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the highest
cost
in 2002 exactly 2
dollars
for each
kilogram
,
finally
was just below 2
dollars
in 2004. The
price
of
bananas
was 2
dollars
in France in 1994 and it
had
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remained constant until 1998 after that it reached
to
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its
the
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lowest
price
exactly 1.5
dollars
for each
kilogram
, after that it saw some oscillations and returned to its
price
in 1994. The
price
of
bananas
in Japan in 1994 was
as
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the same as in France and
then
it experienced an upward trend and saw the highest
cost
exactly
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of exactly
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3
dollars
in 1998
in
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for
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rest
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the rest
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of the years
then
its
price
fluctuated between 1999 and 2003 and
finally
reached
to
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apply
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2.5
dollars
for each
kilogram
in 2004.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, bananas, price, kilogram, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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