The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart compares the
cost
of bananas
in four nations between 1994 and 2004.
Overall
, the price
of bananas
was the lowest in the USA during the recorded period and had the highest average cost
in Japan.
Accroding
to the graph, the Correct your spelling
According
price
of bananas
was exactly 1 dollar for each kilogram
between 1994 and 1997, then
, it increased in 1998 to just below 1.5 dollars
, after
that its Correct word choice
and after
price
levelled off for the rest of the years. The cost
of bananas
in Germany was more than its cost
in the USA during the recorded years and exactly 1.5 dollars
per kilogram
and then
experienced some fluctuations and touche
the highest Verb problem
reached
cost
in 2002 exactly 2 dollars
for each kilogram
, finally
was just below 2 dollars
in 2004.
The price
of bananas
was 2 dollars
in France in 1994 and it had
remained constant until 1998 after that it reached Unnecessary verb
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the
lowest Correct article usage
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price
exactly 1.5 dollars
for each kilogram
, after that it saw some oscillations and returned to its price
in 1994. The price
of bananas
in Japan in 1994 was as
the same as in France and Change preposition
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then
it experienced an upward trend and saw the highest cost
exactly
3 Change preposition
of exactly
dollars
in 1998 in
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for
rest
of the years Correct article usage
the rest
then
its price
fluctuated between 1999 and 2003 and finally
reached to
2.5 Change preposition
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dollars
for each kilogram
in 2004.Submitted by hadadianmohamadhossein on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, bananas, price, kilogram, dollars with synonyms.
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