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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012.
The graph illustrates the changing
rates
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 of crime including
burglary
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, car
theft
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 and robbery in New Port City over a span of 9 years, between 2003 and 2012.
Overall
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, the
rates
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 of
burglary
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 and car
theft
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 decreased,
while
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 robbery
rates
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 stayed almost the same throughout
this
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 period of time from 2003-2012. In 2003, around 3500
cases
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 of
burglary
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 were witnessed and
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 went up rapidly to just above 3750 in 2004.
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, from 2004 to 2008,
burglary
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rates
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 fell considerably to almost 1200 incidents.
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, the incidents contributing to
burglary
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 fluctuated at around 1300
cases
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 between 2008 and 2012. Regarding robbery or
theft
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 from the person, the number of
cases
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 reported remained quite the same during the whole period at approximately 600 reports. Car
theft
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cases
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 met wild fluctuations over the period of 9 years from 2003 to 2012 and decreased non-significantly and slightly from around 2800
cases
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 in 2003 to 2600 by the end of 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rates, burglary, theft, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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