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The table abouve shows data on the demographics of four nations.

The table abouve shows data on the demographics of four nations.
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The chart illustrates statistics on the demographics of four different countries in three categories.
Overall
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, there
was
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were
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 two noticeable
point
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points
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.
Firstly
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, China had the highest
the
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apply
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number of
populations
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population
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 which
it
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apply
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was the lowest one in the outcomes category.
Secondly
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,
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 had the highest earnings, but contrarily, it had the lowest
life
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expectancy
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 out of the other nations. China had significantly the amount of people who were
citizen
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citizens
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 which was 1.3 billion.
Additionally
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, its earnings
for
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apply
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per person was $6,807 and its average
life
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expectancy
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 was 75.2
years
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 on the basis of given data.
Furthermore
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,
USA
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the USA
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 had 3.1 billion residents, and the earnings of citizens in the USA were almost 10 times those in China,
although
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 Americans lived dramatically shorter at just 69.2
years
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. The UK had the lowest population out of the four nations, at just 65 million, but
its
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it
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 had the second highest outcome and the highest
life
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expectancy
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 which were $41,787 and 81.5
years
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, respectively. Russia had
the
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a
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numbers
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number
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 of
citizen
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citizens
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,
at
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of
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 about 144 million, and slightly low GDP per capita of approximately $15,000 and
had
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apply
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almost the lowest
life
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expectancy
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, at 72.3
years
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words life, expectancy, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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