Write about the following topic: Many major cities are facing a housing crisis as they cannot provide enough land for new buildings. Some local governments believe the problem could be solved by reassigning park land for residential development, because this land would be better used for housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Many regions in the world have limited areas for residential. Some governments emphasize that the
solution
is to diminish the parklands and build residential over them. Due to
this
fact, I wholeheartedly disagree with this
solution
because it could affect the benefits of open spaces
for the environment.
Firstly
, open spaces
in the urban areas could reduce air
pollution in the cities because many plants are growing there. There are many plants that could absorb toxic materials in the air
such
as censiverra and by planting these trees, the toxic materials in the air
could be reduced. For instance
, in Surabaya, Indonesia, the government expanded a park that contains many trees which could absorb the air
pollution and it is proven that the percentage of pollution in Surabaya decreased within a few years.
Secondly
, another solution
to the housing crisis could be solved by building apartments that could conclude many households rather than rebuilding the parks. The apartments could be built with huge capacities for people while
the amount of area to build the apartments is smaller than a house for each household. For example
, a 300-meters cubical apartment with 10 floors could contain 30 households while
normal houses for 30 households would need 3 hectares. Therefore
, diminishing the parklands is not the best solution
for the housing crisis.
To conclude
, removing the parklands and changing them with new buildings would decrease the benefits of open spaces
that are needed in the cities. The benefits of open spaces
such
as air
filtering would decrease and affect people's health in the cities. Due to
these facts, I emphasize that the housing crisis should not be solved by changing the lands with new buildings.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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