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Some people suggest that international news should study as a subject in secondary school . However,others say that it will be a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both views and give your opinoin.

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The recent days, many people think that it is necessary to teach middle school learners a course about global news.
While
 others believe it is unnecessary knowledge and will consume their learning time. In
this
 essay, I will draw my two points of view and my personal conclusion. On the one hand, some people consider learning about the global daily news, will expand the students' knowledge
as well as
 their their methodology of mind processing.
Moreover
, it is an emerging teaching procedure of giving real case studies as an example of what happening around the world.
Thus
, it may assist the facilitator in telling stories to empathise . To illustrate, the number of injuries from the wars, and the number of children who are not able to learn, can give a sense of responsibility.
Additionally
, being knowledgeable about finances, investments and information related to money culture, of course, will gain students invaluable subjects for their future.
On the other hand
, another group may say, they can take extra knowledge or some beneficial skills
instead
.
Furthermore
, some information might be harmful to learn or even to view,
such
 as the killers and fires. So, it is not suitable for
this
 category. In conclusion, after discussing both views, it is proven from the second paragraph,
learning
Correct word choice
that learning
show examples
 students about the world, is a merit. By taking advantage and focusing on the great news
that
Correct pronoun usage
they
show examples
 can brighten their minds and add to their extraordinary beliefs.
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introduction conclusion
You have provided a clear introduction and conclusion, which is good. To improve further, ensure the introduction presents a clear thesis statement indicating your position. The conclusion could also summarize the key points discussed more effectively.
relevant specific examples
Your essay needs more specific examples to support the main points better. For instance, detailed examples of how international news has positively influenced students would strengthen your argument.
logical structure
Logical structure is generally good, but some points need clearer development and transitions. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows smoothly into the next. Also, try to avoid repetition of phrases and words.
complete response
You have made a commendable effort to present both viewpoints clearly and have provided a conclusion reflecting your opinion.
clear comprehensive ideas
The essay demonstrates clear and comprehensive ideas, particularly in explaining the benefits of learning international news for students.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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