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Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? What can tourists do to reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience

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A number of people believe that tourism has many negative impacts on the countries that people travel to.
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 statement, particularly
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 environmental degradation, which can be addressed by implementing laws to reduce the environmental footprint of tourists. There is no doubt that overcrowding in natural areas can damage the environment around tourist attractions.
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, the more people visit a well-known location, the more
waste
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 is generated, leading to significant environmental consequences from materials
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 as plastic.
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, both water and air become severely polluted. Despite
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 issue, the government can establish stringent regulations to ensure tourists reduce their
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.
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, minimizing and reusing plastic bottles and metal containers can decrease the amount of
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 in a given area.
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, if tourists follow these regulations, the environment will become more eco-friendly, allowing for more cultural activities and supporting the growth of tourism in the future. To summarize,
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 the careless actions of visitors can harm and destroy tourist attractions,
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 problem can be addressed by enforcing strict rules to reduce
waste
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task achievement
Ensure a more balanced discussion by also considering other potential negative effects of tourism, such as cultural degradation or strain on local resources.
coherence cohesion
Make clearer transitions between paragraphs to enhance the logical flow. Use linking phrases to show the relationship between ideas more explicitly.
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Expand on your examples to make your points more compelling. Include more specific and varied examples to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You present a clear and well-structured argument that tourism can lead to environmental degradation.
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You provide a practical solution (government regulations) to address the negative impact, which makes your response comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-organized, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

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