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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given diagram illustrates some
differrent
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different
 methods of producing noodles in a factory.
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, there are
total
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 of eight steps, beginning with the storage of silos and ending with the
labeling
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labelling
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 and sealing.
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 with, silos
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 been
storage
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 in many massive containers before being delivered to the mixer. After that, water and oil are put into the mixer to blend them.
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this
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 kind of mixture is going to be put on the conveyor to the rollers. After going through that kind of machine, it
is
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apply
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been
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dough sheeted to increase
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the
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of
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them
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. To finish
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 step, it has been dough striped and cut
to
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into
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 many little long
mold
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molds
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 to get easily into containers Moving to
4
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the 4
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last
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 steps, it can be seen that some pasta has been reshaped into discs with plenty of cups under to hold them.
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they have to be dried and cooked to
remain
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 the quality of penne. Following that step, these dried noodles have been wrapped into cups with ingredients
such
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 as vegetables and spices. To finish the process of manufacturing penne, those cups are labelled and sealed by labelling machines to produce fully instant tortellini.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufactured
  • ingredients
  • dough
  • rolled out
  • thin strips
  • steaming process
  • partially cooked
  • fried
  • dehydrating
  • packaged
  • distribution
  • quality control
  • standards
  • flavoring powder
  • sauce packet
  • traditional pasta
  • dehydration
  • instant cooking
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