The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart show the result of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The chart show the result of a survey asking visitors how satisfied they are with their visit during the same two periods.
The pie graphs illustrate the satisfaction of the
visitors
a
year
before and a
year
after the renovation and the table gives information about the
number
of
visitors
in both years.
Overall
, the table showed a high jump in the
number
of
visitors
in the
year
after followed by the pie chart
in
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of
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the
percentage
of
the
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show examples
people
who were satisfied with their visit.
To begin
with, the results of the
year
before display that a large
amount
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number
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of
people
were not satisfied with their visit before the renovation
by
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40% which is a dramatic
percentage
. Followed by 30% of
people
who were satisfied.
Furthermore
, there were three categories left which were the very satisfied by 15%,
people
who were not satisfied at all by 10% and the
one's
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ones
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who did not respond by 5%. Looking at the
Year
after the refurbishment, the
percentage
of
people
who were incredibly satisfied had increased to 35%
instead
of 15%.
In addition
to that, the
one's
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ones
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were satisfied by 30% in the first Pie now it rose to 40%. We can see that the category of
the
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apply
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dissatisfaction had decreased by jumping from 40 to only 15%. Meanwhile, the
percentage
of the not satisfied at all and the
people
that
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who
show examples
did not respond were only 5%. The table shows a huge
increasing
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increase
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in the
number
of
visitors
in the
year
after the renovation with the
number
of 92,000.
In the
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The
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opposite to the
year
before which was 74,000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, year, number, percentage, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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