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The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The
map
 illustrates which
have
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has
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 taken place a park and
its
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it's
it is
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 around 2000.
Overall
, it can
been
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be
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 seen that
of
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apply
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the picture of Grange Park has been
changes
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changed
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 from 1920 to today. There
has
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have
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 been building and removing some facilities
between
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apply
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in the past and recently. Look
the
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at the
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 details picture, starting from
of
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apply
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up entrance right of
map
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the map
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 you can see Rose
garden
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Garden
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 Pond for water
plant
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plants
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 in 1920 but it has been changed by
Cafe
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a Cafe
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 and Children's play area.
Then
 began from
botom
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bottom
 the entrance
Glass house
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Glasshouse
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 had
build
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built
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 in the past.
Nevertheless
, it has been changed Water feature. The centre of the
map
 fountain
had
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was
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construction
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constructed
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 in 1920.
However
, it has been replaced New
rose garden
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Rose Garden
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. Another
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 change
that
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is that
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 of Stage for
musician
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musicians
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it had
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was
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 built in the
past
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apply
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1920
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1920s
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 yet it has been replaced Amptheater for
concert
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concerts
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. The
last
,
Rose
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the Rose
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garden
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Garden
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 the bottom of
map
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the map
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had
Verb problem
was
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build
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built
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 in the past but has been removed the building today.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pond
  • northwest corner
  • large central open area
  • residential areas
  • community-oriented space
  • playground
  • eastern border
  • parking lot
  • convenience
  • commercial zone
  • amenities
  • walking path
  • encircles
  • joggers
  • accessible
  • entrances
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