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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to our environment. What causes global warming? What solutions are there to this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, the biggest threat to the environment is Global Warming. It is increasing temperatures
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 air pollution and climate change. In
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 I will look at some of the causes of
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 issue and I will
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 discuss the solutions to
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 problem.
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 the planet we live on, the Earth, is getting hotter and hotter every year. Burning fossil fuels by cars, power stations and factories releases Carbon Dioxide into the atmosphere and it causes the Greenhouse effect. Another reason is cutting down trees and deforestation which is the effect of population increase.
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, every year, people destroy many tropical forests for the development of cities and houses.
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, using too much electricity
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 as computers, TV and lights can increase the use of energy. The individual and governments can help in several ways. One thing we could do is to replace traditional energy sources with more modern renewable types.
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, if fossil fuel power plants were replaced by solar and wind facilities there would be a great cut in the amount of greenhouse emissions.
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managing the rainforests with less cutting and more planting
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can help to produce more Oxygen and reduce greenhouse gases.
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, they should think of transport solutions. Governments by
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 free public transportation and people by
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less
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 private cars.
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, we can say that using fossil fuels, electricity and
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the destruction
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 of green space has made the earth warmer. All of us can prevent
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 issue with the cooperation of the governments by using more renewable energies
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developing
forest
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forests
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 and using more public transportation.

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coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to enhance flow.
task achievement
While you address multiple causes and solutions for global warming, try to elaborate a bit more on each point to provide greater detail and depth.
task achievement
Though you provide relevant examples, developing these further and connecting them directly to your main points would strengthen your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easy to follow.
coherence cohesion
Main points about the causes and solutions of global warming are logically organized.
task achievement
The essay addresses the task effectively, discussing both causes and potential solutions for global warming.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Climate change
  • Earth's atmosphere
  • Carbon dioxide
  • Methane
  • Nitrous oxide
  • Emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy efficiency
  • Afforestation
  • Carbon footprint
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