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▪️The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

▪️The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates how much
money
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 was spent in the budget on different sections by the UAE government in 2000.
Overall
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, we can clearly see that the largest
amount
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 of
money
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 was spent on social security at 100
billion
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,
While
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 the smallest
amount
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 of
money
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 was spent on transport at 9
billion
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.
According to
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 the graph, the second
considerable
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amount
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 of
money
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 is 53
billion
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 spending on health and personal social services,and the third is education at 38
billion
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On the other hand
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 the internet and other expenditures cost the same
amount
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 of
money
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by
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23
billion
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,
Then
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 defence by 22
billion
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.
Also
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, we can clearly see that the smallest
amount
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 of
money
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 goes to industry,agriculture and employment at 13
billion
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, After that housing, heritage and environment at 15
billion
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, and
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 Law and order at 17
billion
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, amount, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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