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In the past, the main role of teachers was providing information. Today with various sources of information available to students, teachers have no role in modern education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is no doubt that education plays an important role in developing responsible citizens. Historically,
teachers
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 were the main source of information and knowledge,
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,
students
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 nowadays learn most things from online research and self-study. I completely believe that
teachers
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 are the most important providers of knowledge and in
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 essay, I will explore the reasons.
Teachers
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 provide only the relevant material in the correct order and omit any unnecessary content that may cause confusion.
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 is because they are aware of what order to present information so that
students
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 can understand and develop ideas.
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, when teaching medicine, it is crucial to start with physiology, so that the
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 get an understanding of what the normal body functions like before they move on to the pathology and
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 the treatment.
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, when loaded with information about a disease on the internet, it could become difficult to form a clear understanding.
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 are
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 still the best option for learning and developing in any field. Most
teachers
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 have invaluable experience obtained from long
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 of working and researching.
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, most high school
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work
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 for many
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 and have seen multiple badges of
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 progress and graduate,
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, know what methods of teaching work and how the specification of the learning content has changed over the
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.
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, they are able to understand the learning abilities of the children and are able to teach by sharing their knowledge and experience. In conclusion,
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 the internet has a vast amount of learning content, I completely agree that it cannot match the education provided by
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.
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 is because they have gained experience over many
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 and can provide targeted education based on the understanding of the student.
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