The diagram shows the lifecyle of a species of fish called salmon.

The diagram shows the lifecyle of a species of fish called salmon.
The flow chart illustrates the development of large fish called
salmon
during their life cycle.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are three stages in the process, starting with
salmon
eggs in the upper river and ending with the development of adult
salmon
. The first stage occurs when
salmon
lay their eggs under small stones near the reeds in
slow moving
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sections of the river.
This
stage lasts for nearly half a year. In the next step, the fry, reaching 3-8 cm in length,
move
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to rivers with
fast flowing
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water, where they stay and grow for around four years. In the final stage, the fry
grow
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into smolts, and the smolts become bigger, reaching nearly 12-15 cm.
Then
they move to the open sea to grow and become adult
salmon
, reaching a length of 70-75 cm and staying there for nearly five years. Having completed all these stages, the life cycle will
then
begin again.
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