In many countries, the number of people suffering from stress is increasing. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to tackle it?
In more than one country the number of
people
affected by stress
is rising. I think that stressful environments in which people
live, work or study and a lack in
communication are the Change preposition
of
stress
' main causes, but there are measures that can be taken in order to solve the problem.
It is known that stress
is usually caused by a psychological state of mind, which can be related with
the Change preposition
to
environment
that sorrounds
Correct your spelling
surrounds
people
during their daily activities. Indeed, it is not uncommon for a place of work to be full of negativity and problems
. People
in most cases are paid to solve these problems
, however
, a negative working environment
could mean an easier tendency for workers to suffer from stress
. For instance
, football players are more likely to have good performances if the whole team creates an environment
without any form of stress
or tension between players.
However
, managers can easily create a positive working environment
by taking some practical measures. In my opinion, the most important thing is the creation of a room that keeps out any form of stress
. It should be placed far away from all the working space's noises. Furthermore
, managers should put inside furnitures
that Change the wording
furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
people
to release stress
, like sofas or comfortable armchairs. In addition
, I think that communication between all workers has to be promoted. People
who speak and share their problems
are more likely to prevent stress
than those who try to solve problems
by themselves.
In conclusion, I believe that stress
is mainly caused by an inappropriate working environment
and failures in communication between workers, but these problems
can be easily fixed by some manager's decisions.Submitted by alessandrorepola.repola on
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