Some people think that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that the priority of
government
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is spending expenditure to extend the quality of private vehicle roads like cars and motors
instead
of investing in
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system
of
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. From my perspective, I partly disagree with
this
statement
due to
some reasons and providing a concluding view for both
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following the essay. On the one hand, I would agree that spending
expense
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on upgrading the path of private cars is very efficient.
In other words
, in Vietnam,
majority
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of people have almost
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personal vehicles
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transport
,
therefore
, the main
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of
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increasing the convenience of traffic circulation.
For example
,
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system
of
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city like HCM city in Vietnam,
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is crowded frequently
due to
a lot of residents and workers in here moving every day so investing
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route of personal vehicles
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justifiable.
As a result
,
this
issue will observe a decline
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traffic congestion, improving the comfort
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transport
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system
.
Nevertheless
, I
also
believe that enhancing
public
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transport
system
is
also
essential to ensure the quality of social life better.
That is
to say, nowadays,
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amount of employers
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on gathering metropolitan
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to gain the opportunity
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jobs. Thence, developing the transportation in public
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citizen
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to
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adopt it. That will make the circulation in busy
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become allocated reasonably.
Furthermore
,
the
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transportation contributes
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a
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decline
of
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pollution.
For instance
, buses and trains now are operated by electric power
instead
of gasoline fuel. In fact,
this
will decrease the air pollution and noise pollution.
As a result
, the state doesn’t have to waste large money to reduce the
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issue. In conclusion, investing in roads and motorways is not as effective as in public transportation systems
due to
the superior characteristics of saving resources and protecting the environment.
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Task Response
Structure your introduction more clearly by directly stating the extent of your agreement or disagreement in a separate thesis statement. This clarifies your position from the beginning.
Coherence and Cohesion
Incorporate transitions more effectively to enhance the flow between ideas and paragraphs. For example, use phrases such as 'Furthermore,' 'In addition,' 'On the other hand,' etc.
Task Response
The essay provides a balanced view on the topic by discussing both the importance of private vehicle roads and public transport systems.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph is focused on a single main idea, contributing to the coherence and clarity of the essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • public transport systems
  • economic growth
  • traffic congestion
  • carbon emissions
  • social equity
  • urban development
  • sustainable
  • mobility needs
  • revitalization
  • efficiency
  • safety
  • reliance
  • combatting
  • mitigating
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