Some people think that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that the priority of
government
is spending expenditure to extend the quality of private vehicle roads like cars and motors Correct article usage
the government
instead
of investing in transport
Add an article
the transport
system
of community
. From my perspective, I partly disagree with Add an article
the community
a community
this
statement due to
some reasons and providing a concluding view for both phenomenon
following the essay.
On the one hand, I would agree that spending Change to a plural noun
phenomena
expense
on upgrading the path of private cars is very efficient. Fix the agreement mistake
expenses
In other words
, in Vietnam, majority
of people have almost Correct article usage
the majority
used
personal vehicles Wrong verb form
use
to
Change preposition
for
transport
, therefore
, the main strategies
of Fix the agreement mistake
strategy
authority
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the authority
are
increasing the convenience of traffic circulation. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
For example
, transport
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the transport
system
of central
city like HCM city in Vietnam, Add an article
the central
a central
which
is crowded frequently Correct pronoun usage
apply
due to
a lot of residents and workers in here moving every day so investing the
route of personal vehicles Change preposition
in the
are
justifiable. Change the verb form
is
As a result
, this
issue will observe a decline of
traffic congestion, improving the comfort Change preposition
in
in
Change preposition
of
transport
Add an article
the transport
system
.
Nevertheless
, I also
believe that enhancing public
Correct article usage
the public
transport
system
is also
essential to ensure the quality of social life better. That is
to say, nowadays, large
amount of employers Change the article
a large
focuses
on gathering metropolitan Change the verb form
focus
area
to gain the opportunity Fix the agreement mistake
areas
of
jobs. Thence, developing the transportation in public Change preposition
for
make
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makes
citizen
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citizens
to
adopt it. That will make the circulation in busy Fix the infinitive
apply
area
become allocated reasonably. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Furthermore
, the
transportation contributes Correct article usage
apply
on
Change preposition
to
a
decline Correct article usage
the
of
pollution. Change preposition
in
For instance
, buses and trains now are operated by electric power instead
of gasoline fuel. In fact, this
will decrease the air pollution and noise pollution. As a result
, the state doesn’t have to waste large money to reduce the polluted
issue.
In conclusion, investing in roads and motorways is not as effective as in public transportation systems Replace the word
pollution
due to
the superior characteristics of saving resources and protecting the environment.Submitted by [email protected]
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Task Response
Structure your introduction more clearly by directly stating the extent of your agreement or disagreement in a separate thesis statement. This clarifies your position from the beginning.
Coherence and Cohesion
Incorporate transitions more effectively to enhance the flow between ideas and paragraphs. For example, use phrases such as 'Furthermore,' 'In addition,' 'On the other hand,' etc.
Task Response
The essay provides a balanced view on the topic by discussing both the importance of private vehicle roads and public transport systems.
Coherence and Cohesion
Each paragraph is focused on a single main idea, contributing to the coherence and clarity of the essay.