Differences between countries are becoming less evident. Nowadays people are watching the same films, brands, advertisements and TV channels. To what extent do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advanatges?

In light of the proliferation of technology, people are able to communicate worldwide, leading to cross-cultural interactions.
Therefore
, the disparities between countries are shortened,
result
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in a trend of watching the same TV
programs
.
Although
companies can promote their
products
through
this
tendency,
this
writer contends that it may cause ethnocide and conflicts between countries. There is no doubt that bridging the gap between nations
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opportunities for national brands to advertise. Specifically, by abbreviating the distance of countries, those companies can expand their marketplace easily and
exporting
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products
globally. It is evident that retailers can recognize the current trend of customers and fulfill their demand through
overall
TV
programs
,
therefore
,
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the excessive
products
to gain profit.
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,
BBC
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record has consistently shown that teenagers are more likely to gravitate toward luxury fashion brands, by comprehending
this
, former companies could give suitable plans
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this
. Notwithstanding the aforementioned advantage,
similar
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watching
trend
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not only cause culture loss
,
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, but
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on contrary
also
create arguments among residents. If viewers depend on watching foreign shows, there will be
less
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traditional channels and
programs
, causing
lack
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of
interests
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interest
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in national culture.
Consequently
, ethnocide is going to happen which may lead to
destruction
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of a country.
Besides
that, it is vital to understand that each nation
have
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different cultures causing
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several
point
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of
views
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,
therefore
, conflicts are inevitable. Those arguments will make the friendship between states
will be
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worsen
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. Taking Vietnam and China as a prime example, despite
previous
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existed
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arguments, residents there are still watching and
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the same tendency,
as a
result
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result,
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more and more conflicts occur leading to bad foreign
relation
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relations
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. In conclusion, the benefit of promoting
products
is eclipsed by the drawbacks of possible ethnocide and dissension among inhabitants.
Thus
,
that
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TV
programs
should not be observed worldwide.
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