The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the proportion of adults participating in various popular
sports
in one specific place from 1997 to 2017.
Overall
, the
numbers
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number
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of people participating in
sports
have been
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has
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increased throughout the
periods
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period
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. Despite that, there
were
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was
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dramatic
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a dramatic
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decreased
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decrease
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in people playing cricket in 2017 compared to 1997 whilst, the levels of adults in swimming remained unchanged. The major
sports
such
as basketball, football and rugby escalated substantially from approximately, 90, 31 and 32
thousand
in 1997 to nearly around 22, 48 and 49
thousand
respectively in 2017. Meanwhile, tennis rose slightly from 50
thousand
to almost 55
thousand
in 1997 and 2017 respectively.
Besides
, swimming remained stable with just more than 30
thousand
over the period of
times
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time
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.
In addition
,
sports
such
as golf slightly increased within 2 decades but crickets showed
dramatic
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a dramatic
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decreased
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from nearly 26
thousand
to just around 7
thousand
in
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from
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1997 to 2017.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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