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The chart below shows the number of films produced five countries in three years.

The chart below shows the number of films produced five countries in three years.
#films #five #countries #three #years
Contained in the bar charts is data pertaining to movie production in five distinct countries from 2007 to 2009.
Overall
, the
number
 of movies produced in
country
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Country
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 B,
country
 C and
country
 E increased,
while
 there was a decrease in
country
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Country
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 A and
country
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Country
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 D.
Additionally
, despite having a drop in the final years,
country
 A still came out on top throughout the surveyed time. Beginning with
country
 B, the
number
 of
films
 which were produced in 2007 accounted for exactly 50
films
 before dramatically rising to 70
films
 in 2009. Regarding
country
 C, its figure was much lower, which began at just under 10
films
 by 2007,
then
 went up to roughly 15
films
 and finished at nearly 17
films
 in 2009.
Similarly
, there was a steady rise in the
number
 of movies produced in
country
 E from approximately 9
films
 to 11
films
 between 2007 and 2009. Moving onto the remaining statistics where the
number
 of
films
 produced in
country
 A stood at around 88
films
 in 2007 and remained unchanged in the following year before declining to exactly 80
films
 in the final year. In terms of
country
 D, its figure dropped from roughly 15
films
 to 9
films
 between 2007 and 2008.
This
 was followed by a recovery to approximately 14
films
at the end
 of the period.
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