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The chart below shows the number of films produced five countries in three years.

The chart below shows the number of films produced five countries in three years.
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Contained in the bar charts is data pertaining to movie production in five distinct countries from 2007 to 2009.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of movies produced in
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country
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Country
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 B,
country
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 C and
country
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 E increased,
while
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 there was a decrease in
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country
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Country
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 A and
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country
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Country
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 D.
Additionally
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, despite having a drop in the final years,
country
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 A still came out on top throughout the surveyed time. Beginning with
country
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 B, the
number
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 of
films
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 which were produced in 2007 accounted for exactly 50
films
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 before dramatically rising to 70
films
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 in 2009. Regarding
country
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 C, its figure was much lower, which began at just under 10
films
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 by 2007,
then
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 went up to roughly 15
films
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 and finished at nearly 17
films
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 in 2009.
Similarly
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, there was a steady rise in the
number
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 of movies produced in
country
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 E from approximately 9
films
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 to 11
films
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 between 2007 and 2009. Moving onto the remaining statistics where the
number
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 of
films
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 produced in
country
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 A stood at around 88
films
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 in 2007 and remained unchanged in the following year before declining to exactly 80
films
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 in the final year. In terms of
country
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 D, its figure dropped from roughly 15
films
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 to 9
films
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 between 2007 and 2008.
This
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 was followed by a recovery to approximately 14
films
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at the end
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 of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, country, films with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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