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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO,) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO,) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The graph describes the average carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per
person
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 in four European countries:
United
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the United
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 Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. The United Kingdom and
Sweden
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 both reduced their
per
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per-person
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person
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 CO2
emissions
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 significantly over the 40 years with
Sweden
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 showing a more dramatic reduction. In
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
emissions
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 in 1967 were around 11 metric
tonnes
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 per
person
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 and in 2007,
emissions
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 dropped to approximately 9 metric
tonnes
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person
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. In
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Sweden
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Sweden,
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emissions
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 peaked in the early 1970s,
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 reduced steeply. Italy’s
emissions
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 rose steadily, especially noticeable between 1977 and 1987. By 2007, ending at roughly 7 metric
tonnes
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person
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. Portugal, starting with the lowest
emissions
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 reached about 5 metric
tonnes
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person
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.
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, the data indicates differing trends among the four countries, with the UK and
Sweden
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 making substantial progress in reducing
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,
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 Italy and Portugal saw increases, especially significant in the case of Portugal.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, person, sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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