The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show the site of a college in 2006 and the present day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate the changes that have taken place at
the
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Lynwich
College
from 2006 to the present moment.
Overall
,
it is clear that
while
some parts remained unchanged including the second
college
building,
and
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sports
field, cafeteria, bus stop and bike storage were added to the
map
. It is interesting to note that, in 2006, there was a path in the centre of the
college
, which connected the
college
buildings, and the
library
.
Also
to the North of the
map
, there was one more road. To the Southeast of the
college
, a
sports
field had been opened up. To the North of the
sports
field, there was a
library
next to some trees.
Moreover
, there was a car park on the Northeast of the
map
. Turning to the present-day
map
, the
library
has been replaced by a
sports
centre, and it has been moved to the Southwest of the area.
Also
, the main path has been expanded by two different new ways, which are connected cafeteria.
Additionally
, there was a deforestration the place which is
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library's
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libraries
library
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. A new bus stop took place near the road which is on the North of the
college
.
Finally
, bike storage has been built next to the car park.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words college, sports, map, library with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • underwent significant changes
  • consisted of
  • large open space
  • utilized
  • relocated
  • limited facilities and amenities
  • wider range of facilities and amenities
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