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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line chart depicts the number of individuals participating in various sports categories, including
basketball
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,
tennis
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,
badminton
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, and
rugby
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, from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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rugby
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 experienced a gradual
decline
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 throughout the years,
while
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tennis
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 showed a significant rise from 1985 to 2005. In 1985,
rugby
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 dominated with approximately 240
participants
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.
However
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,
this
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 number steadily declined, dropping to nearly 50
participants
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 by 2005.
In contrast
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,
tennis
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 demonstrated an upward trend, starting at 150
participants
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 and rising to roughly 230 by 2005.
Basketball
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 and
badminton
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 illustrated relatively stable patterns.
Basketball
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 started
at
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with
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 nearly 70
participants
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, experienced a slight
decline
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 in 1990, but
then
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 returned to 70 by 2005.
Similarly
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,
badminton
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 began with around 55
participants
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, experienced a minor
decline
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, but
then
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 returned to around 50 by 2005. In summary,
tennis
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 gained popularity by 2005,
whereas
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rugby
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 showed a significant
decline
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.
Basketball
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 and
badminton
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 maintained relatively stable participation rates throughout the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words basketball, tennis, badminton, rugby, decline, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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