Write a letter to your local council that the road in front of your house is damaged. In your letter, you should: tell him your name and where you are living describe the problem suggest what you want him to do for it.

Dear Sir/Madam I hope
this
letter finds you in good health. I am writing
this
letter to inform you with regard to the problem
i
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have experienced about
current
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situation of the
road
in front of my house.
To begin
with, I am Ihsan Hidayat who lives in
the
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Block 04 of Melati Street. I
have
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moved here two weeks ago and
find
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the street damaged.
i
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I
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have been waiting for the reparation, but
i
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did
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not
see
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any act yet since the damage
of
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the
road
are
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is
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getting bigger all the time. For the additional information, here are several
problem
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with the
road
that
i
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have found. The
road
damage
are
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getting bigger as the trucks
passed
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the
road
and
made
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the
road
damage uncontrol.
Furthermore
,
this
made the
road
cannot be used for the car, and it is only used for the bicycle and
motorcycle
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. I am waiting for any
fyrther
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further
action regarding
this
problems
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problem
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.
i
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cannot do my daily
activity
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properly if
the
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things
happens
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like
this
way. Thank you for your consideration in advance. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon Yours sincerely Ihsan
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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coherence cohesion
The letter could benefit from a clearer structure. For instance, merging related ideas into single sections could improve readability.
task achievement
Pay attention to some small grammatical errors such as 'i' should be capitalized to 'I' and 'reparation' should be 'repair'.
task achievement
You successfully mentioned your name and where you live at the beginning of the letter, providing clear context.
task achievement
You elaborated on the specific nature of the road's problems, providing clear detail.
coherence cohesion
You included a polite closing, which contributed to a suitable writing tone.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Grievance
  • Deterioration
  • Hazardous
  • Impede
  • Inconvenience
  • Potholes
  • Cracks
  • Collapsed
  • Uneven
  • Detour
  • Repair
  • Maintenance
  • Investigation
  • Infrastructure
  • Expenditure
  • Resolution
  • Improvement
  • Community
  • Resident
  • Safety
  • Convenience
  • Traffic congestion
  • Civic
  • Enquiry
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