In many countries, the number of people suffering from stress is increasing. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to tackle it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The past 50 years have seen a considerable increase in the number of people suffering from stress-related

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some possible solutions to it. Chief among the causes of

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is poverty. It is an undeniable fact that the cost of living, nowadays, is sky-high. If people want to survive, particularly in developed cities, they may need to sacrifice their leisure for minimum wages, especially for unskilled labourers, including janitors and taxi drivers.

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, the burden from work and living has no way to be relieved

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the lack of leisure. Another contributing factor to stress is emotional detachment. Some countryside people may choose to leave their

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town or country, which usually is undeveloped, to look for better opportunities in big cities. Lacking attention from family and friends,

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leavers may have a higher chance of experiencing anxiety and pressure. In order to stem the tide of the

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, I believe we must first address its root causes.

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, governments could implement policies to regulate labourers’ maximum working hours

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their minimum wages.

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working for shorter periods with higher salaries, interests and free

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activities,

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as sports and having massagers which are good stress relievers, become more affordable, both in terms of

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and money. One

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method is that employers could offer their employees a longer vacation period during holiday seasons so those

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leavers would have enough

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for family and friends’ reunions back

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. By way of conclusion, stress coming from work and social distancing are unlikely to be resolved in a short

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, it is by no means insurmountable, I believe that the measures outlined above would constitute a good first step.

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You have given a comprehensive response to the task and identified relevant causes of stress and potential solutions. However, to enhance the essay, additional specific examples could strengthen the points made.

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Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. Ensure that each paragraph logically flows and that your points are supported with clear examples and evidence.

coherence cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are well framed, providing a clear context and summary to your essay.

task achievement

You have effectively identified key causes of stress and provided corresponding solutions, showing a thorough understanding of the topic.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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