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THE graph bolow givas information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

THE graph bolow givas information about international tourist arrivals in different parts of the world. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates
of
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international visitors who
travellers
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travel
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 to five different countries between 1995 and 2010 at fifteen-year intervals.The unit on the Y-axis is shown in millions.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the trends of all five networks are upward with the most striking feature from 1995 to 2010.
To begin
 with,in the USA during
this
 period,the
travellers
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 lasted 10 years and
then
 began to trend
the
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 steady decrease between 2005 and 2010.
In contrast
,the
number
 of vacationers who arrived the France rapidly grew to 60
percent
.
However
,the sightseers just only 30
percent
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the
number
 increased 2 times from 1995 to 2000.The data proportion increased dramatically more than the other four countries between 1995 and 2000.
Thereafter
,the data
was
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fairly
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 steady growth
almost
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 10
percent
 between 2000 and 2005.
After
this
,the
number
 was a dramatic rose start with 2005 for the next 5 years.
On the other hand
,during
this
 period,
France
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France's
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 sightsees
number
rise
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rose
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lasted
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between 1995 and 2005
,
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after the visitors grew dramatically almost
increased
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15
percent
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per cent
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 between 2005 and 2010,the
number
 higher than the two countries.
In addition
, Brazil and Egypt were similar line graphs the data rose and fell over the period,but the trend was upward between 1995 and 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 3 times.
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