IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6.5

The table below shows the amount of waste production [in millions of tonnes] in six different countries over a twenty-year period.

The table below shows the amount of waste production [in millions of tonnes] in six different countries over a twenty-year period.
#amount #waste #production #[in #millions #tonnes] #six #countries #period
The table depicts the amount of
waste
 produced in
Ireland
, Japan,
Korea
, Poland, Portugal and
US
Correct article usage
the US
show examples
 over a 20-year period from 1980 to 2000 It is noticeable that the amount of
waste
 produced
of
Change preposition
by
show examples
 the US,
Ireland
, Japan, Portugal and Poland registered dramatic upward trends,
while
 that of
Korea
 witnessed a completely opposite trajectory during the surveyed period.
US
Correct article usage
The US
show examples
, notably, was by far the most popular in
waste
 output in 2000 From the outset of 1980,
waste
 output in
US
Correct article usage
the US
show examples
were
Change the verb form
was
show examples
 the highest, accounting for almost 131
tons
, which was higher than Portugal, Poland
and
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
Japan,
Korea
 and
Ireland
 respectively.
Thereafter
, they
sharp
Change the word
sharply
show examples
 increased and reached the highest point, with respective figures being 53
tons
, 6.6
tons
, 5
tons
 and 192
tons
. Commencing from 1980, approximately 0,6
tons
 of the production
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
waste
 came from
Ireland
,
while
 no data is given for
waste
 material in
Korea
 in the initial year.
Subsequently
, there was a sharp rise to about 31
tons
 in the figure for
Korea
 in 1990, followed by a considerable decrease to nearly 19
tons
 in 2000.
On the contrary
, the data of
Ireland
 did not produce any
waste
 in 1990, before rising to about 5
tons
 in 2000
Submitted by [email protected] on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, ireland, korea, tons with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: