The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
The table gives information about how consumers in five different countries spent on items in 2002. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is clearly obvious that the Irish and Turkish spending on food, drinks and tobacco dominates some other countries,
while
on the opposite side was Swedish.
Additionally
, the citizens in Italy spent more on clothing and footwear
while
people from
Turkey
were leaders in spending on leisure and education. The most spending on food and drinks was
Turkey
and
Ireland
with 32.14% and 28.91%, in
this
terms Spain spent 10% less than compared with
Ireland
while
people from Italy and Sweden were the
last
on the list with 16.36% and 15.77%. Italian was the leader in spending on clothing and footwear with 9.00%, consumers from
Ireland
, Spain and
Turkey
had the same percentage a little more than 6%, in
this
terms Swedish people were the most recent on the list with 5.40%. In the third category
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leisure and education, the average amount in the five countries is lower than other items.
In particular
, Spain only spent 1.98%,
Ireland
2.21% and approximately
moreover
3% spent by Italian and Swedish nations,
Turkey
spent more compared with
other country
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, probably 4%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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