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You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club. In your letter: • introduce yourself • say why you are interested in this sports club • ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, members,costs

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to inquire about your
sports
club
, which I recently discovered through advertisements in the local broadsheet.
Initially
,let me introduce myself : My name is Jasmine. Recently,I have started a
course
 at a
college
 near your
sports
club
. I thought I would train after lessons in
sports
 facilities.
However
,I
was wondered
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am wondering
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due to
this
college
 has no
sports
 facilities of its own. I started a
course
 in
this
college
 because I thought it would have
sports
 facilities.
Then
,I saw
on
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an
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advertisements
Fix the agreement mistake
advertisement
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of
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for
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 your
sports
club
on
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in
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the broadsheet
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broadsheet
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Broadsheet
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 and
fortunately
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fortunately,
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 it was near my
college
. I was so glad that I
have
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had
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 found
private
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a private
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sports
club
. I
spent
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spend
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 one part of my day in
a
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apply
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college
 and after
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the course
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course
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course,
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 I need to relax. I do
sports
for relaxing
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to relax
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. So, your
sports
club
 is the best choice for me. I would like to know more about your
sports
club
. The number of members currently in the
club
 and the types of activities they typically do. I want to find a friend in your
club
.
Lastly
,I would like to know more about the costs
in
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 your
club
. Because these days I have some financial problems and I am afraid that I can not afford
this
course
 Thank you for your time, and I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Jasmine
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single idea per paragraph
Make sure to clearly separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs to enhance readability.
logical structure
Try to avoid minor grammatical errors to improve clarity and professionalism.
complete response
The introduction of yourself and the reason why you are interested in the sports club are clearly stated.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone throughout.
greeting and closing
The letter starts with an appropriate greeting and closes with a polite farewell.
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