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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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As advanced development in various aspects thrived,
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 are enjoying a high-quality life.
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, some
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 believe that modern life stands for a higher level compared to the previous one. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 point of view. On one hand, there were no rapid commute systems and information in the past, which was not as accessible as the present.
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, most infrastructure was built after a few industrial revolutions, in a
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 that required
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 number of workers to accomplish construction,
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 as railway systems.
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 resulted in spending more
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 on their work and commute
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.
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, the Internet has only appeared in recent decades,
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, receiving abundant information or connecting with others was quite challenging. Lives in previous times were hard and there were no comprehensive techniques to provide convenience.
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, infrastructures are experiencing continuous improvement in modern times, the aforementioned examples are now sophisticated and even have ground-breaking development.
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,
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 can travel within a short
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, arriving at places that might take weeks when taking boats. Without wasting a large amount of
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 commuting, and is beneficial to one's efficiency.
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, the Internet is a common element in our lives,
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 are able to receive new information and interact with
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 around the world online. Since most things are accessible in the present
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, I believe that the
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 living in the new era are living in a higher standard of life In conclusion, though each era had a significant revolution to
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 the living quality, new constructions based on the old foundation are mostly superior to previous ones.
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, I agree that
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 living in the present century indeed have a better living quality.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Quality of life
  • Technological advances
  • Healthcare systems
  • Life expectancy
  • Information access
  • Digital tools
  • Comfort and convenience
  • Modern conveniences
  • Mental health
  • Environmental degradation
  • Urbanization
  • Human rights
  • Social advancement
  • Life satisfaction
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