Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years. summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features
The pie graphs compare information about the spending patterns in
Japan
and Malaysia
on housing, transport, food, and healthcare. Overall
, it is clear that
people
in Japan
spend more money
on other goods and services than in Malaysia
, while
citizens in Malaysia
spend the highest amount of money
on foodstuff.
In Japan
, 29% money
Change preposition
of money
spent
on other goods and services, which is higher than Add a missing verb
is spent
Malaysia
's by 3%. Moreover
, people
in Malaysia
spend 27% of their money
on food, whereas
in Japan
people
spend 24%. Housing costs
people
in Malaysia
34% of their money
, in comparison with Japan
at 29%.
However
, healthcare costs
people
in Japan
6%, but in Malaysia
, it costs
them only 3%. Transportation costs
families in Japan
a fifth of their money
, while
it costs
people
in Malaysia
only 10%.Submitted by nidaa_hamed on
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