Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years. summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features

Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years.  summarizes  the information by selecting and reporting the main features
The pie graphs compare information about the spending patterns in
Japan
and
Malaysia
on housing, transport, food, and healthcare.
Overall
,
it is clear that
people
in
Japan
spend more
money
on other goods and services than in
Malaysia
,
while
citizens in
Malaysia
spend the highest amount of
money
on foodstuff. In
Japan
, 29%
money
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spent
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on other goods and services, which is higher than
Malaysia
's by 3%.
Moreover
,
people
in
Malaysia
spend 27% of their
money
on food,
whereas
in
Japan
people
spend 24%. Housing
costs
people
in
Malaysia
34% of their
money
, in comparison with
Japan
at 29%.
However
, healthcare
costs
people
in
Japan
6%, but in
Malaysia
, it
costs
them only 3%. Transportation
costs
families in
Japan
a fifth of their
money
,
while
it
costs
people
in
Malaysia
only 10%.
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