Many people say that globalization and the growing number of miltinational companies have a negative effect on the environment .to what extent do you agree or disagree?
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economy.Most proponents believe that the increasing number of multinational businesses and globalisation are harmful to the environment.I strongly ad
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statement that internationalization reversibly affects the climate and puts a heavy strain on developing countries.The following paragraphs will discuss Linking Words
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the development and progress of a country.A large figure of multinational groups are considered the rise the economy chart of a nation ,Change preposition
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it brings a number of problems that negatively affect the surroundings of that country and in the long run, affect the whole world.These industries often exploit natural resources in developing countries without adequate consideration for environmental sustainability,leading to deforestation,water pollution and loss of biodiversity.Linking Words
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, the expansion of global trade means an increased number of transportation of goods across the world,significantly contributing to greenhouse gas emissions and global warming.
Many developed communities have maintained strict rules and regulations.So multinational trades move operations to regions with weaker environmental regulations,enabling them to pollute and exploit resources without facing significant legal consequences.Linking Words
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few decades,China progressed vastly because China has given relaxation to all these companies.The reason behind Linking Words
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pressure to attract foreign investment ,leading to lax enforcement of environmental standards.Linking Words
On the other hand
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showcasing that globalisation can drive environmental improvement.
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economic pressure is a great cause for globalisation,multinational companies negatively affect the environment.Every country needs to develop rules to prohibit Linking Words
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Your essay adequately addresses the prompt and provides a clear stance that you support the notion that globalization and multinational companies negatively affect the environment; however, ensure to avoid minor grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'ad' instead of 'advocate.'
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