Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

Dear  Pedro
pedro
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Pedro
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I was happy to receive your request for assistance with your college project on New
Year
celebrations around the world. I'm pleased to share with you how
New
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Year
celebration 
is observe
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in my country. On New
Year
's Eve, families and friends gather for a special dinner. Every
year
I
saw
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traditional
sald
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salad
, the
sald
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said
name
olivie
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Olivie
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and Qashqadaryan
people
cooked
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  meat.
People
of
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in
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my country wait
for
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until
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  twelve at night because New
Year
’s Eve came midnight  twelve at. At midnight, you will see a different
color
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in the sky
because
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because of
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fireworks .
People
exchange warm wishes ,
kiss
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, and different gifts . Everyone comes together to celebrate a shared experience,
learn
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and learn
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from our mistakes. Someone creates a song for the new
year
and presents it to the public. Some
people
promise
themselves
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apply
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to try to improve their lives in the new
year
.I hope
this
information helps you with your project. If you have any problems, you can say it without
shy
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by organizing the letter more clearly. For example, group related ideas into paragraphs and ensure there is a clear flow from one idea to the next.
task achievement
Ensure grammatical accuracy and fluency. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, word order, and sentence structure to make the letter easier to read.
task achievement
The letter adequately addresses each point in the task (importance of New Year, how it is celebrated, and what is liked about it).
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The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for a letter to a friend.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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