The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.
The line graph illustrates the information regarding the
rate
of the change in Burglary,
Car
theft
,
Robbery
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and Robbery
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in Manchester City
center
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between 2003 and 2012. Looking at the
overall
structure, it is readily apparent that the
car
theft
crime
rate
was demonstrated by an upward indication over the period
while
the least indication was shown by Burglary. Probably, it is mainly noticeable that in the initial year, the Burglary
rate
was reached at the top range.
Then
this
indication fell severely
up
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from 2004 to 2012.
Besides
, the crime
rate
of
car
theft
continued to rise significantly every year. After that, the
overall
of
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robbery
rate
almost remained stable which
were
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roughly 500.
At the end
of the period,
this
place becomes more stable
with
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the
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some cases.
Car
theft
crime has fluctuated, beginning from 2003 to the end of 2009 with above 2.000 and under 2.500. The numbers changed around 1.000 cases between 2009 and 2012.
Although
less a number of robberies than in any of the other crimes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, car, theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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