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The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar diagram illustrates the total of three different programmes downloaded from the Internet per
week
. The unit in the X-axis is shown in 1000 seconds.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 computer users mostly download ActiveX
while
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 they are not interested in
Net
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.
Moreover
, the trend of Java increases throughout the period whilst the other two
programmes
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 swing.
To begin
 with, the number of ActiveX downloaded in
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week1
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week
 occupied 70 and
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 shot up to an enormous 110 in
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a week3
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week
. A slight drop was seen in
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the week4
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week
 before escalating to a gigantic 120 in the
last
week
.
Furthermore
, Java registered a nominal 40 in
week1
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week 1
 and gradually rose to approximately 80 in
week5
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week 5
. What is interesting to note is that the Java package in
week1
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week 1
 was less than the ActiveX in
week5
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week 5
 around 3 times.
Additionally
, the volume of Net began at a nominal 30 and nosedived to a minuscule 10 in
week3
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week 3
;
consequently
, soared and ended the record at 50. What is surprising to see is that
this
 programme from the third
week
 more than the fifth
week
 by 5 times.
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