The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the divorce rates of two countries,
Finland
and
Sweden
in percentages between 2011 to 2015.
Overall
,
Sweden
showed
initially
some growth
at the end
of the period outraced by
Finland
.
On the other hand
,
Finland
continuously showed growth in breakup rates till 2015,
initially
with some fluctuations.
However
,
Finland
’s rate increased as compared to
Sweden
's. It is conspicuous that the percentage of
Sweden
was nearly 45% in 2011, as compared to
Finland
, it had about 10% lower in the same period. The separation rate rose to less than 50% in 2012,
although
, after that, it started to decline every year and reached about 36% in 2015. Probing ahead, the percentage of
Finland
, was 37% in 2012, with
further
decline experienced about 33% in 2012 as compared to
Sweden
which was almost 50% in the same year. After that, it can be experienced the regular split rate increased in the following years to 35% in 2103 and close to 42% in 2015.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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