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some people think that we should invent a new languge for international communication . Will the benefits of this outweigh th problems associated with it

#people #languge #communication #outweigh
These days a new
language
 is drawing a lot of attention from
public
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the public
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 . In some cases , the majority of
people
 believe that a new
language
 for
people
over
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 the world should be created . I really trust that the advantages overshadow the disadvantages and the reasons will be explained now .
To begin
 with , the most advantageous factor of new inventions is that
it
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 can bridge the gap between nations . If it does not have
communication
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 barrier , some international problems will be easier to deal with
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such
 as
environment
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the environment
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 ,economic wars ,...
As a result
 , the development can reduce negative
affects
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effects
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 for every country even small nations. Another point to consider is that students who want to go abroad to study , will not waste time ,money ,... to learn new languages.
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Furthermore
, the overpopulation can be solved
due to
 flexible movement.
For instance
 ,
people
 from some crowded nations as China ,
India
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 ,... can go to others which have few residents to live or study. The main drawbacks associated with the ability of
people
 . For
exampl
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example
, some
people
 like elders who are too old to learn a new
language
or
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homeless
people
 ,
orphans
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and orphans
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don't
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who don't
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 have enough money
to go
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to study .
As a result
, they cannot catch up with other
people
. In conclusion ,after carefully considering many aspects of the given issue
in
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the topic
that
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is that
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 we should invent a new
language
 for global communication .I still believe that the benefits are more significant
the
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than the
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 drawbacks
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