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In some countries, owning a house rather than renting one is very important for people. Do you think this is a postive or negative situation?

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There is a controversy
whether
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about whether
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 residents opt to purchase or rent a
house
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.
This
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 author will be prior to the latter opinion
due to
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 its convenience and flexibility. Many people consider
to buy
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buying
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 accommodations because
its
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it
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seem
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seems
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 to private and possessive. With
a
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apply
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permission to
selling
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sell
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 your
house
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, it will probably be your budget and investment which is may
lost
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lose
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 or win a huge sum of money.
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, it could be
easily
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 to reconstruct or redecorate your
house
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whatever
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in whatever
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 way that you
desired
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desire
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.
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, people can build
the
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an
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extend
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extended
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 section or
painting
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paint
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 their room when they have exigency. Parallel with those benefits is that owners
be
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are
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 able to lease or even
lent
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lend
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 it to others who are gaining many pros. Talking about the tenants, it could be observed that by using dwellings which
are not belong
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do not belong
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 to them, they have their positives about flexibility.
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 the owners sometimes have their accommodations sold or
rent
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rented
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 before they move away
due to
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 financial problems, the tenant
show
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shows
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 more
conveniences
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convenience
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. The prime example is in
case
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the case
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 of job transferring or emigrating, the only thing that renters must have done is pay the remaining rent and go. Renting houses
also
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 is
the
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a
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 considered choice
while
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 residents have quite limited budgets or housing requirements, especially with young workers.
To conclude
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,
while
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 there are many benefits
can
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that can
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 be brought by owning a
house
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but
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apply
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there is no doubt that renting
them
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one
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 is better. Flexibility within changing
purpose
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purposes
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 is the most
considering
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considered
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 reason that dwellers opt to be
a tenants
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a tenant
tenants
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.

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task achievement
Your essay begins with a clear statement, but try to provide more background information in the introduction to set the stage for your argument.
task achievement
Ensure that your points are thoroughly supported with specific examples and explanations. This will make your argument stronger and more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Using transitional words and phrases can help link your ideas more coherently.
coherence and cohesion
You might want to include a concluding sentence for each paragraph that wraps up your point and links it to the next one. This will improve the overall cohesion of your essay.
task achievement
Your essay covers both perspectives of owning and renting houses, which demonstrates a comprehensive approach to the topic.
task achievement
The use of examples, although needing more detail, is a good strategy to make your points clearer and more relatable.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps provide structure.
coherence and cohesion
You attempt to provide reasons and justifications for your opinions, which shows a good effort at developing your argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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