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The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts provide an overview of the marital status of the populations in
Canada
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 and
Australia
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. In
Canada
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, the majority of the population, 53%, is separated but not divorced, indicating a high rate of marital separation.
This
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 contrasts with
Australia
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, where 46% of the population is married, suggesting a higher stability in marital relationships. The proportion of married
individuals
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 in
Canada
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 is lower at 29%, reflecting the higher separation rate. Regarding
individuals
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 who have never married,
Canada
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 has a slightly higher percentage at 7%, compared to 6% in
Australia
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. The percentage of widowed
individuals
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 is
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 marginally higher in
Canada
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 (7%) than in
Australia
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 (5%). One significant difference is in the category of same-sex marriage, which is present in
Canada
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 at 3%, but not recorded in
Australia
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.
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 highlights a potential difference in the recognition or reporting of same-sex marriages between the two countries. The percentage of divorced
individuals
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 is relatively close, with
Australia
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 at 6% and
Canada
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 at 7%. These figures suggest that divorce rates are somewhat similar, though slightly higher in
Canada
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.
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, the marital status distribution in
Canada
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 shows a higher incidence of separation without divorce,
whereas
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Australia
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 has a greater proportion of married
individuals
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. The presence of same-sex marriage in
Canada
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 but not in
Australia
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 is
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 a noteworthy distinction. Despite these differences, both countries have comparable figures for
never married
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never-married
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, widowed, and divorced populations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words canada, australia, individuals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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