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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. at least 150 words.
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The given graph illustrates
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the differencies
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differencies
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differences
of
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in
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 overseas visitors to the
coast
, the
monutains
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mountains
 and the lakes in a European country from 1987 to 2007. In general,
three
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the three
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area
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areas
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also
 increased but the mountains increased
more
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less than other areas. The
coast
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cost
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 was 40
thousand
 and it was the first
one
 when it started and it decreased slightly to approximately 35
thousand
 in 1992. After that, the
coast
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cost
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 started to
increased
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increase
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 and it continued with dramatic
grow
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 until just over 70
thousand
 overseas visitors between 1992 and 2007. The mountains started as the second
one
 on 20
thousand
 level in 1987. It climbed steadily until 1997 and it stayed in
same
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the same
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 point between 1997 and 2002.
Then
 it grew again but not much and it finished as the third
one
 in 2007. The lakes were the
last
one
 in 1987 but it rose sharply and reached to 40
thousand
 in 2007. After that, it increased
dramaticaly
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dramatically
 again and it was more than the
coast
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cost
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 in 2002. And
finally
, it reduced sharply to 50
thousand
 in 2007. It finished as the second
one
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coast, thousand, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • number of
  • areas
  • European country
  • between
  • 1987 and 2000
  • graph
  • introduce
  • overview
  • trends
  • describe
  • analyze
  • compare and contrast
  • summarize
  • main findings
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