Some people think that governments should provide subsidies to farmers to produce cheap healthy food. Others think that governments should tax companies producing unhealthy foods. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Several
people
argue that
governments
should give more
fundings
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to
farmers
so they can produce affordable healthy
food
. Another argument
say
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that
companies
whom
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who
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producing
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produce
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unhealthy foods should get higher
tax
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taxes
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from the
governments
. Personally, I am more leaning towards the first opinion and I will elaborate
this
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in the next paragraphs.
Farmers
are the key players
to provide
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affordable healthy
food
for
people
in a city or a country. 
Food
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The food
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that they
produced
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are
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usually vegetables and fruits, which are substantial for
people
's health. In order to increase these healthy
food
stocks, the
governments
must ensure that the
farmers
will get the help that they need so they can cultivate their farms. Through subsidies and easier access to maintain their farms,
farmers
can produce more fruits and vegetables so they become more accessible and affordable for
people
to consume
it
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apply
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.
Moreover
, affordable healthy
food
will create a consciousness in
people
's
mind
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minds
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to maintain their health and form a healthy habit.
In contrast
to that, taxing
companies
that
producing
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produce
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junk
food
is not productive. It may
sounds
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good for some
people
because they feel they have more control over these
companies
and limit the production of
junk
food
.
However
, it is not that easy since most
of
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the
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corporations are known for
tax
evading through lobbying official
governments
. Because of that,
tax
is not a big deal for these corporations and they will continue to produce and sell their
junk
food
. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, subsidies for
farmers
are more beneficial because
it
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they
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can give them more access to healthy
food
and
creates
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create
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healthy
habit
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habits
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for the
people
.
In
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contrary
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the contrary
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, taxing
companies
are more likely to fail because evading
tax
is a common thing that
these corporation
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this corporation
these corporations
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and
production
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the production
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of
junk
food
will still continue.
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task response
Ensure that you address both views in more detail, providing balanced discussion before stating your own opinion. Currently, the first view (subsidising farmers) is well-developed, while the second view (taxing unhealthy food producers) is less detailed and persuasive.
coherence and cohesion
Strengthen your conclusion by summarising the main arguments more clearly and reiterating your opinion succinctly.
task response
The essay offers a clear opinion, favouring subsidies for farmers over taxing unhealthy food producers, and provides reasons to support this view.
coherence and cohesion
Logical structure is maintained throughout the essay, making it easy to follow the author's line of reasoning.

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