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The graph below shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

The graph below shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.
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The given graph presents the figure for participants in 4 different
sports
 in a specific area from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
, it can be seen that all the
sports
 categories had an upward trend with the exception of tennis.
Additionally
, badminton and basketball had a similar pattern throughout the timeframe. For
thee
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 of the four given
sports
, a rise can be noted.
Initially
, about 150
people
 started playing tennis in 1995 and
then
 its figure moderately increased to over 200
people
 after a decade.
Subsequently
, it gradually climbed to nearly 250
peole
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people
 in 2005. Regarding the remaining mentioned categories, the same trend was seen
on
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 them with basketball's number
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 for around 70
people
 in 1985 and slightly went up to exactly 100
people
 in the final year, that of badminton was lower as it was just over 50
people
 beginning to participate in
this
sports
 in 1985 and slowly went an up path to under 65
people
 in 2005, respectively. Turning to the
last
 kind of
sports
, where basketball stood out
the
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 chart as there
was
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 approximately 250 participants at its first appearance in 1985. After that, the statistic was equal to that of tennis in 1995, presenting 250
people
,
then
 decreased to nearly 200
people
 after 5 years. At the final point, it significantly went down five times and
observed
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 at more than 60
people
 ending the timeframe.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sports, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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