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The table illustrates the predicted costing over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. While the pie chart shows the projectured expenditure breakdown allocation for the only first year as the projects are set up.

The table illustrates the predicted costing over the next 5 years in American dollars for three environmental projects for sustainable forestry. While the pie chart shows the projectured expenditure breakdown allocation for the only first year as the projects are set up.
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The given table
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 the estimated spending for 3 different forestation plans during a 5-
year
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 period,
whereas
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 details of how the money will be spent in the
first
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year
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 are reported in the pie chart.
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, it can be seen that even though the plan of the Asia region is going to climb throughout the timeline, other nations' expenditures will decrease.
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,
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 staff's salaries make up the most of the costs in the
first
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year
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, training and office expenses are in the likelihood the least. Regarding the table where West Africa and Central America's green projects are planned to cost about 10.5 and 20
million
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dollars
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 when they
first
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 start. As for Africa, its expenses are going to drop to just nearly a quarter of the
first
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year
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 by
year
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 3 before having a slight increase of 1
million
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dollars
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 at the
last
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 stage.
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, the project of Central America will have a significant reduction in costs to 12
million
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dollars
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 after a
year
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 and to 5
million
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dollars
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 after another
year
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 which was
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 its plateau for the rest of the timeframe. In terms of Southeast Asia, it is projected to be the most expensive plan among these 3 regions with a considerably increasing cost from roughly 30
million
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dollars
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 to 50
million
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dollars
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 eventually. Looking at the table half of
year
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 1' spending is on salaries,
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 the put-up costs are going to be around 20% lower.
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, training and office fees are likely to share an identical sum of approximately 10%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words first, year, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Projected costing
  • Sustainable forestry
  • Environmental projects
  • Expenditure breakdown
  • Financial commitment
  • Allocation of funds
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Deforestation
  • Technological advancements
  • Policy changes
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