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The chart below gives information about computer ownership in the US from 1997 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about computer ownership in the US from 1997 to 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the proportion of
computer
 ownership by year between 2002 and 2010 and classified by education in 2002 and 2010. The general overview is that yet time to time, the
computer
 owner
percentage
 was gradually increasing in an upward trend.
While
 the one who got higher education level always got
higher
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percentage
 of buying
computer
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a computer
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.
According to
 the chart of
computer
 ownership graded by year, it is apparent that in 2002 the people
bought
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 computers are responsible for just under 60%. After that, the trends slightly rose up by 2-3% every 2 years.
Finally
, in 2010, the ratio of owning the computers was accounting for around 70%. Moving on to the chart of
computer
 ownership classified by level of education, it can be seen that in 2002, the highest
percentage
 of owning
the
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computer
 was the
one
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 who
got
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 postgraduate
qualification
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qualifications
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, accounting for approximately 75%, followed by the lower qualifications like bachelor’s degree for 70%, college for 55%, high school graduate for 40% and no high school diploma was the least for 15%.
Additionally
, in the next 8 years, the trend
was remain
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 followed
the
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last
 record, yet the
percentage
 of each educational level
was
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apply
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increased
around
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by around
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 20-30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computer, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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